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Timeless: A literal piece, I thought it was pretty cool tbh. Turtles trying to cross the road I guess, at least that's how I understood it. Enjoyed the read and your approach to the topic. The rhymescheme could have been upped a little, but that's about it. Decent lil piece you got there. Don't really got anything more to add.

dyedinthewool: Liked your word choices here and there. The approach was cool but could have been built upon to paint a clearer or a more introspective image or something. I don't know, felt it was cool, but kind of lacking overall in terms of the topic at hand. There's so much you could have done with that kind of approach that left me asking why you didn't take it to the next step of a deeper message or a more complete story. It was allright for what it was, but I think with a bit more time and more building on the ideas you got it could have been a lot better overall.

Vote: Timeless for a more complete verse and a more interesting/enjoyable approach. Decent battle.