Lars, your display of detail towards the evolution idea of life itself transitioning to the human era from beginning to end was dope. I enjoyed this piece a lot. Don’t really have any complaints with it, I would mention a couple rhyme schemes but it’s not really significant. No filler to point out, everything seemed relevant. This was dope man, not much else to say.
Dead, your wordplay is one of the best I’ve ever seen, I’m sure that has been said to you many of times so I’ll spare it. As for your approach to the topic, it was really complex. As close as an interpretation I would have of this would be That the mythical gods of the sea created this island as a type of church for themselves. A type of beta test before Earth was constructed by it’s creators. I must’ve read this 4 times over, trying to put more pieces together. lol
For me personally, I have to vote on who had the more enjoyable read in my eyes. Content wise, they were equal. Wordplay, flow, approach to the topic, etc. All equal imo. I just feel more satisfied after reading Lars verse, it told a complete, intricate tale of the building blocks of life, and didn’t really leave me hanging or any questions to be answered. Black had a more intricate verse than lars, which could go either way in the voter’s perception, depending on what you initially get out of it after a complete read. Dope battle here though with two great verses to send it off.
V.Lars
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