[PancakeBrah]

timeless -

This was interesting. I liked the route you took with the topic, it was different than what I think most would do. Your verse had some weird wording and punctuation/grammar in my read through, maybe I just wasn't catching what you were trying to say. But overall this was a cool little verse with some nice lines here and there. Maybe a bit too much existential stuff but that's a nitpicky qualm. Solid.

dyedinthewool -

I liked your ending three lines. The concept of your verse is probably one of the first someone would think of if they were to go a metaphorical route with the road. Not a problem, per se, but it leaves you open to losing to a better approach. I liked the style you wrote in here, very easy going. Not a lot of fuss with a focus on the content. Kind of refreshing. The brevity may hurt you in the eyes of some voters but I didn't find anything intrinsically wrong with it.

This is the first battle I've read this week that I've had a tough time deciding. I initially wanted to go with dyed but in rereading both verses I felt dyed's was a little more cliche than I initially remembered. This was a close one, fellas, and the loser shouldn't feel bad about losing. Interesting match.

v/ timeless