Pancake: Nice to see the switch from the verse in Open Mic, completely different take, felt this one resonated more and had a lot more material people can relate to when reading - the other/first take I read seemed more comedic in approach, to me at least, but this one was a lot sharper from a technical standpoint and it made the flow to it really easy to get into.
Quote:
Idle hands do the devil’s work. Fine,
but idle minds do a labor of a worst kind.
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I thought that couplet was dope, the opening of the last section too but I really felt the above one. Great wording and rhyme placement throughout, arguably one of the best writers voices on the board IMHO. Good way to flip it from your initial thought as well here. Top showing.
Math: You obviously struggled with the topic this week, but you've a lot of potential here if you stick at it, the shorter lined steez can work to your advantage against some of the heads in the AOWL because your flow is really easy to find and consistent with it, you've a grasp on the mechanics behind the verse from a technical standpoint, you just need that creative spark to really turn on for you and your style will be a problem, I'm sure of that. The ending more so than the start was pretty impressive and I'd say perhaps a better display of what you're capable of, it was just getting that initial drive or idea to attack because once you had it, your verse read a lot more polished and original.
I'm going with Pancake here though, just thought he excelled in a lot more areas, from the approach to the execution. Keep those pens moving!