Liked both verses, VUlgar's was riddled with the usual solid mechanic and witticisms, The tone of your pieces has strong currents of intelligent thought but sometimes the humor doesn't mesh well. The steel urinary tract part was lol but it just seemed like a bit of trivia to me and softened the strong pulse you created. That said I think humor can be used well in topicals but it's tricky and you pulled it off more times than not in this piece which is cool. Cool verse.
King , wassup my N.I.G...dope verse. Some SAW type shit with great mechanics, it's clear you have elevated loads from when we first met. My problem is that it's a verse with writing that could have produced a great standalone verse, but Vulgar's was complete. He didn't blow you away by any means it was a see-saw because I found myself trying to see if I could spit yours to a beat as a read but in a league setting I believe the fragmented nature of the story hurt you. Good to see you my dud ebut I'm gonna
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