Idk, i have mixed feeling about this battle.
Neutral, i really like where you went with the whole snake charmer route. My only priblem is i read it a couple times and i dont know if i got your point. I believe it had something to do with man being like the snake and we are consistently "charmed" by all these materialistic things ect ect. Now i could be wrong, and herenin lies my problem. I hate having to work to understand a verse and connect it with a topic. In a topical battle i feel that should be pretty clear. None the less i really enjoyed the verse.
Diode, i really enjoyed the first verse amd really thought you were going to edge this out but you went and fuckin wrote in another language. And while thats great for the people who can understand it, it's also a turn off for the people who can't. I kinda just said blah blah blah in my head on those lines and it rwally took away with the comfortableness i had reading your verse. I don't know, imo that hurt you because i really was leaning towards you after that first verse cuz this in right up my alley in terms of favorite subjects to read about.
Vote-neutral
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