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Old 03-01-2014, 01:17 AM   #6
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We need a new CEO. Doctrine and dogma is boring,
Fire and brimstone is just so one-thousand and fourteen.

^Def my favorite line out of quite a big selection. Loved the approach you took here leaving god off the throne as if making religion into a gimmick itself. Dope read man, couple of stretched bars I couldn't really get down with towards the end but overall this a def possible VOTW, imo.

Exo quite the opposite, seems like you rushed your idea into one verse that just so happened to rhyme. Idk, just couldn't get into it man. Its cool you tried to bring out a powerful, emotional type of piece but it just didn't work out. The wordplay was too basic, etc.

Gotta give this to Zyg pretty easily here.
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