Lol i like how you both took a semi-religious concept from the topic.
Zyg, dude you're amazing, i thought i got my piece up fast but damn. For the complexity of this piece and the time it took you to write it, you get mad props. as for the verse itself it was really good. Talking about the lack of "presense" felt in our today's world. The miley cirus line made me chuckle as did the dlc map pack upgrade concept haha. This really was just an awesome piece, i enjoyed every bit of it.
Exo,
first thing ive read from you man and i really liked it and was impressed. I think you started off really strong but kind of tapered off towards the middle. I felt a little wanting after reading your piece. Like i wanted to know what condition she had and a little more insight into their lives.. it just felt really rushed. Don't get me wrong it was jam packed with this great emotion but it went from waving to your daughter to in the hospital room on life support in like 2 seconds. I would have just liked to see you expanding on the back drop.
Anyways ziggy really brought it this week and that would be a really rough verse for anybody to beat. He gets the vote this week but I can't wait to read more from both of you.
Mvgt=zyg
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