This was really good. Your writing has improved dramatically since the beginning of Season 2, in terms of both mechanics and diction. There were a few too many forced rhymes, like "Congest the blessed" and a few others. I think you rode too many internal but simple rhymes. But I really liked the ending, up until "ourselves." I thought that last word was unnecessary and cut into the open-ended finish.
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