Ydk,
"Demonic urges storm the skies with a heavenly essence Death is a sentence to those without a destiny present. Put yourself first but never put your enemy second, because every second beckons when an entity threatens."
Realest shit ever wrote. Most frown on the straight forward approach but when its got its good its good and this was real good.
"Expecting to implode when you think you're alone, Leaving a chink in the armor that you can never atone for."
Didnt like this line tho. Wording thru me off.
Ink,
"Every day, went through the motions, reading the same script Living vs. surviving, thin line in a room dimly lit"
Favorite bar to me. The story was legit and touched the topic nicely. I seen no problem story wise but i felt wording was off a couple places and didnt rhyme to me. The flow was sketchy too.
Story vs straight up... I like writing storys more and ink had a good story just some tecnical errors and could have been a smoother read. ydk had some fire and spoke more to me.
VOTE....YDK
GOOD MATCH YALL...
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