[Mike Wrecka]

aight I read this battle twice. I really enjoyed both verses a lot.

YDK - imo , this was the best verse you have ever posted on this site. you finally didn't half ass it that was obvious. work was put into this piece. it had a very polished feel to it. I will be honest I didn't know you were capable of this level

Demonic urges storm the skies with a heavenly essence
Death is a sentence to those without a destiny present.
Put yourself first but never put your enemy second,
because every second beckons when an entity threatens.
Lesson learned; now let the pressing questions adjourn,
a confession of depression isn't easily earned.
Frequently turned against you in the form of a heart,
It's torn apart and restored; now that's sort of an art

just sick sick sick sick sick. that's five sicks. I could read that shit all day tbh. the complexity of the rhyme scheme and the elegance of the multis jumps out at me. and the flow is so fluid. very impressive.

you faltered a tad here

Like a scope predisposed to puncture the occipital lobe,
The soul grows weaker with every drink and sip of the soave.
Expecting to implode when you think you're alone,
Leaving a chink in the armor that you can never atone for.
Unforgiving hopelessness, nobody can cope with this sober,
So a crushed up pill and a dollar bill helps to handle the closure.

wasn't in love with those lines

this was dope

Soulless body's wander growing fonder of death,
Refusing their fate, until they're somber; bereft.
Hell seems to have an odd calming effect,
Destroying our souls while embalming the rest


love the use of bereft there.

overall - I really liked this verse. the complexity of the rhyme scheme and really strong multis, especially in the first half was incredible. it finished strong. it was more of an overview on society than a story line with a plot but that's ok. that's a classical topical route. it shouldn't be disregarded as the lesser. some great writers still use that method sometimes. dead man comes to mind. dope stuff.


INK - welcome back homie. you brought your usual incredible plot driven storyline. the last one I remember reading from you involved a guy and a girl at an amusement park getting killed on a roller coaster or something. this piece was much much better than that strong verse though.

Cheap metal rattles the saddles of this mechanic beast
The wind unleashed
Crashed down on immigrants like they're a bathtub fleet

I wanted to see mechanical there. I think it was a typo. actually im sure of it.

Unsettled speech, intertwines with seatbelt warnings
"Can I please have your attention, it's your Captain speaking
We will be landing shortly, though the weathers turned sour
Welcome to America, paved with minimum pay per hour"
The runway and tires fought like an old married couple
Jostling the cargo of aliens like ET bobbles
The screaming, the pushing, and the hiss of hot tears
The domestic violence was comforting to the pioneers


this felt a little clunky. it wasn't that smooth tbh. the old married couple metaphor was really cool. the following line with the ET bobbles felt out of place.

Backlogged, he slaved away, his wife entered the fray
Her pretty hands now calloused, as talks of children fade
Day by day, the orders came, he didn't turn any back
When he was young, business was tough, so he chased after the cash
Without a free moment to enjoy, they paid for it with time
One year, then decades, their chosen currency flew by
Every day, went through the motions, reading the same script
Living vs. surviving, thin line in a room dimly lit
Wrinkled skin stretched over iron, rusted feet in fresh shoes
Hear the gears creak, two machines with much to do


beautiful. it was well written and I found the storyline at this point to be captivating. it pulled me in fully. this section was very strong. the story was going full blast and teaching a lesson at the same time about people that chase the dollar their whole life working hard but never enjoying the fruits of their labors. that's powerful and deep. and thought provoking. so A plus plus plus right there brother.

I just wish you started the verse with that section and maybe just elaborated on it more. the immigrants coming to America section did nothing for me. get to the meat of the story and linger there a tad longer perhaps.

just some minor minor qualms with a really dope verse. thanks for the read. enjoyed it both times I went through it.



OK we have YDK verse which was technically dazzling in the beginning that puttered out for a short stretch in the middle but finished strong. while telling about some of the weaknesses of the human race. against Inks coming to America story about a shoe maker that wasn't quite as technically impressive as YDKs but did really bring up some thought provoking things to meditate on. very close battle. could go either way but I liked YDKs more


vote - YDK