Wza, Im always a fan of the “truth” conspiracy theory type of stories or movies. Always enjoy thinking outside the box on life’s many unanswered questions. It shows that you rushed this, or not, either way a complete concept wasn’t drawn out and it came off as a rant, which is boring imo. The first half you killed it, loved the wordplay and overall content, then you just went into that rambling state. Not bad though, rhyme schemes could’ve been transitioned better, but not bad.
Clock, not to sure about your ending or what exactly took place. I might just be too high to tackle it, even after a couple reads. Not enough details within the characters. Not a bad read though, real smooth, decent wordplay etc. The only thing I would really pick at was your rhyme schemes, but I would only do that if the flow was off for the most part, which it wasn’t. I enjoyed this, just wish it had more character detail since they were the focal points on the storyline.
Gotta give this to Clock for a more complete approach to the topic. If wza would’ve had his thoughts gathered more, this would’ve been a lot closer to decide.
v.Clockwerk
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