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Old 02-24-2014, 08:53 PM   #15
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I've never heard of a swag and flow battle lol

I felt like Zen was just going on 20 tangents and using arbitrary multis. It seems like something I would expect to see somebody freestyle. Just because you're bragging about yourself doesn't mean you can't incorporate some elements of wordplay...or at least some imagery or metaphors or aspects of humor.

Like Eminem saying some shit like

"The one man on the planet that'll drive off of the Grand Canyon
Hop out of a Grand Am and land in it handstanding
Any man planning to battle will get snatched outta his clothes
So fast it'll look like an invisible man standing"

but I didn't really see anything in Zen's verse that I'd consider quoteworthy

Ra, some of your verse almost comes off as if you're dissing opponent - but I understand that even in braggadocio rhymes, peple tend to use proverbial "You's". Aside from that, your verse was solid - I didn't really see anything that made me go "Oh snap" but the video game references were cool & there were was no shortage of metaphors or wordplay.

Solid job on both sides

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