This was tight with some minor blemishes. The first four lines were impressive, you came out with an honest swagger that immediately caught on.
I've learned a few things burned through mood rings,
bipolar disorder got me switching through queue strings.
"what if's" and Emotions that I've been holding inside,
been showing that I've known that I can openly cry.
^Nice.
Now I know she was strong surviving cancer for years,
Striving for perfection with a small selection of fears.
Failure was never one of them but to me its the worst,
because I'd rather die in my prime than living a curse.
^Wording-wise, the parts I bolded were slightly jumpy. I would've said 'than live with the curse' instead.
Overall you did your thing.
Keep doing you
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