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Originally Posted by Mike rips Mics
I said im Rolling in the Deep feel the fire at my feet
cause im on an uphill battle and this travels pretty steep
and this road is pretty narrow so make sure that you can see
come equipped with bows and arrows or prepare for your defeat
what I mean?
that this game is full of sharks trynna eat
everybody got the same goals and the same dreams
no lights we putting up fights in dark streets
don't know where im headed so I follow my heart beat
young nigga born in Nine four (94) , don't get it twisted ive fought in 9 wars
im a mo'fucking general money coming in like its revenue
the only goal I had was to always be ahead of you
and prove to you hating that ima fucking make it
whether now or in the future my ambitions never fading
and prove to you hating that ima fucking make it
whether now or in the future my ambitions never fading
i said it twice i hope that you get the memo
now roll up that cigarillo, they sleep on me like a pillow
perc got me so mellow, im so high like Hello
smoke that Lala like Melo, Eyes redder then elmo
and im always strapped Velcro,
bodies on the shottie watch how quick i let them shells go
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Some good lines here. The heart-beat line was good. Some nice concepts but there's so much of these ego/gangsta 'I'm gonna make it' pieces that you'd need to have done somethin' way more fresh than this for it to truly stand out.
Not that your scheme is bad or your rhymes were sh*t, just that the concept is done so much that it all gets a bit samey and this felt mediocre in some ways. The repeated line felt a bit overdone, and the beginning was stronger than the end. The elmo line made me laugh but it doesn't fit the whole sinister-ish vibe at the beginning. It felt like you started off gangsta and ended up pot-smokin' and havin' a joke.
you have potential but I've got a feelin' you could do better if you didn't confine yourself to this.
Anyways, just IMO.