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Old 02-23-2014, 11:18 PM   #8
Sharp
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beans, no hate but that verse was corny and not too effective. read some battles and try to get a sense of the style cause your verse looked really old in style and the concepts weren't too good... stay up tho cause your verse read smoothly and thats a great sign from someone new to the site



u're a faggot with no motivation, this chump should quit
ur only Passion.. is a condom brand your boyfriend fucks you with
even the weakest here can leave u severed and bruised
you cant write a KwaL!ty SCRYPT.. & they're both better than you

solid stuff even tho it seemed a bit rushed... good to have you back bro

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