[Rawn MD]

man i wrote a whole reply but it got deleted

basically, ur delivery is not good - u dont pause, or use any vocal inflection at all

ur presence is alright, bc u sound confident, but its empty bc u dont do ne thing with it to be impressive w ur delivery

ur flow is consistant, but not on beat at all - its like u laid the lyrics independent of the beat and then just put them ontop of the instrumental

lyrics were nothing special either - and hi feel like u didnt write them to the beat or even acknowledge there was a beat - u just went w a melody in ur head and wrote - which isn't necessarily bad, but if ur going to do that u need to let ur delivery tie it together, which you didnt do at all

quality of the recording was good though, but it sounds like someone is talking in the background which is distracting n confusing

and

beat selection was dope af bc tried by 12 is a classic; but u really kinda ruined that for me by not working with it at all

i wish i could say something more positive bro, and i dont mean to b an ass - but work on ur delivery the most, then ur flow bc it gets pretty bland - meaning write to a beat and keep in mind the kicks and snares n sht - also work on ur lyrics bc there was nothing stand-out-ish about ne thing other then some decent scheming.

stay at it though. Hope this helps.