Netcees - View Single Post - Shadow Boxing rnd1 Witty vs cntrlf4

Strikta · 02-20-2014, 09:02 PM

My rhymes bring the fight that ur heart lacks, to leave ur ego dented with hard facts
Ur bars wack, there ain't been a dope CTRL line since Kendrick Lamar's track
Aiight
Stop the played rhymes or I'll cop some jail time for hate crimes, u lazy disgrace
As I lay him to waste, you'll see his first original lines come from a blade to his face
Eh
The way ur living is bummy, I bet it feels like prison, ur getting played and shit isn't funny
His first time on a plane, he got excited at a random check cuz he thot they were givin him money
This was ok
This winter's cold, but the chrome I lift and point at your swollen lips is colder
Ur hoe's a bitch, she's like chyeahhh, some1 needs to tell her get off the polar shift is over
Dope
Ur poor as fuck, you rob for pennies, to get paid you just raise eagles
So what little cash he actually gets is tainted....it taint his and it taint legal
I see what u were trying to do, & it didn't work for me
This lame's feeble, U ain't scary...blow me, ur a fairy u just keep it very low key
Though ur last battle proved to Aero that black people should stay away from Karaoke
Ok close

Vs.

I hate this dude, I'm throwin hay makers til he aches n bruise
I'm gonna beat fox 2 the point he'll get a slot on the breakin news
Ok
Sorry about ur childhood but hey life isn't fair
Cuz at 17, I was playing True Crime: Streets of L.A. and you was prolly out living there
Nah
Nobody likes you and you really need a life dude
Cuz you don't just spend time irl alone, you do it on the site too
U could have done something better w/ this
Ur mom's a lost freak. RT that thot is reckless
Every night she let's me compass in her mouth n gets sent back n ur pops direction
lol
You've neva scored dweeb, stop actin like you givin whores d
You probably only named urself witness, Cuz ur known for telling stories
Ehh, naw
All ya rape threats is weird n makes us think ur screwed wit
You created "That Awkward Moment" wayyyy before that new flick
Ok close

This was kinda close actually.. I got Witty edging it tho.. he had a more crisp verse & just slightly slicker concepts. They were almost even on quotes I'd say.. it really would all just come down to preference tbh.. & if Ctrl would have came just a tad better idea-wise, or cleaned up his wording some.. he coulda took it in my eyes. Another thing working against him was the explanation at the beginning of the verse, as it is a nono in text to me. U shouldn't ever have to resort to doing that.. it kinda fucks w/ the authenticity of what ur about to have us read. Other than that, props to both of ya'll for a cool read.

Vote- Witty

02-20-2014, 09:02 PM	#8
Strikta 39 NS, lost in votes once Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 11,242 Battle Record: 32-40 Champed - Time to Kill X - Write Week III Rep Power: 84181452	My rhymes bring the fight that ur heart lacks, to leave ur ego dented with hard facts Ur bars wack, there ain't been a dope CTRL line since Kendrick Lamar's track Aiight Stop the played rhymes or I'll cop some jail time for hate crimes, u lazy disgrace As I lay him to waste, you'll see his first original lines come from a blade to his face Eh The way ur living is bummy, I bet it feels like prison, ur getting played and shit isn't funny His first time on a plane, he got excited at a random check cuz he thot they were givin him money This was ok This winter's cold, but the chrome I lift and point at your swollen lips is colder Ur hoe's a bitch, she's like chyeahhh, some1 needs to tell her get off the polar shift is over Dope Ur poor as fuck, you rob for pennies, to get paid you just raise eagles So what little cash he actually gets is tainted....it taint his and it taint legal I see what u were trying to do, & it didn't work for me This lame's feeble, U ain't scary...blow me, ur a fairy u just keep it very low key Though ur last battle proved to Aero that black people should stay away from Karaoke Ok close Vs. I hate this dude, I'm throwin hay makers til he aches n bruise I'm gonna beat fox 2 the point he'll get a slot on the breakin news Ok Sorry about ur childhood but hey life isn't fair Cuz at 17, I was playing True Crime: Streets of L.A. and you was prolly out living there Nah Nobody likes you and you really need a life dude Cuz you don't just spend time irl alone, you do it on the site too U could have done something better w/ this Ur mom's a lost freak. RT that thot is reckless Every night she let's me compass in her mouth n gets sent back n ur pops direction lol You've neva scored dweeb, stop actin like you givin whores d You probably only named urself witness, Cuz ur known for telling stories Ehh, naw All ya rape threats is weird n makes us think ur screwed wit You created "That Awkward Moment" wayyyy before that new flick Ok close This was kinda close actually.. I got Witty edging it tho.. he had a more crisp verse & just slightly slicker concepts. They were almost even on quotes I'd say.. it really would all just come down to preference tbh.. & if Ctrl would have came just a tad better idea-wise, or cleaned up his wording some.. he coulda took it in my eyes. Another thing working against him was the explanation at the beginning of the verse, as it is a nono in text to me. U shouldn't ever have to resort to doing that.. it kinda fucks w/ the authenticity of what ur about to have us read. Other than that, props to both of ya'll for a cool read. Vote- Witty Last edited by Strikta; 02-20-2014 at 09:05 PM.