I found myself trying to rhyme 'countryside' with 'most of his life' in the opener, no idea why. I'm obsessive on shit like that.
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He invited his niece Genevieve for supper, feeling generously sweet
She had an energetic chic to her, sensuous, petite, clever to the teeth
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I liked this couplet, second is really well written with the internal rhyme, liked the sweet and teeth thing too as the two related.
I thought the switch up in the next couplet threw me slightly, had to re-read to make sure I was at the right point in the story, the whole Phineas title had me lost completely because I'd no idea how to rhyme that place name haha! I love your batshit craziness creativity wise though, you're one of a kind in that sense, the characters and idea is completely out there.
The closing section was my fave, actually, a great little moral twist to it and to be careful what you wish for.
HOF