[Certain]

Aesthetically, this verse was very pleasing. Your rhymes bounced all over the place smoothly and didn't feel forced. I liked the images you presented and your descriptions of the various aftershaves and the acknowledgement of the power of scent in seduction. But I just don't know what happened in the end, and that's pretty much a deal-breaker. I've read this four times now, including a few days ago, and still haven't put together what that ending was about. So Marilyn/Marylyn falls for our narrator while he's wearing the Brut, but our narrator still wants to try something else for no apparent reason. And once he disrupts his normal smell by trying these other things, the bond is broken? Why are they in an aisle full of various aftershaves when he's been using the same one forever anyway? That was strange.

You wrote this very well. The content didn't keep up.