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Old 02-18-2014, 12:33 AM   #3
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Good stuff, enjoyed the writing tone and the reminiscing quality to the language. “When we were 10, Carved J+M in an oak tree” very nice. The transition part in the middle when the emotions changed was sudden but that was a good effect. Good resisting any chance to go over the top, just keeping it very direct and straightfoward. It brought the emphasis to those good aspects.
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