[King Karaoke]

Hi...

I been starvin so I'm carvin out a dude veins,
Then goin at his 'neck' jus to take a stab at the fuckin 'food chain',
I got them choppers that'll blast and end lives wit precision,
So i'm poppin em off and leavin his crew wit more 'flatlines' than my new television

Food chain line was ok but I like the way it was worded
closer had a nice concept...
U had concepts but need to develop them more...

shank u while ur on a date w/ wifey, hit ya chest w/ the blade hard
have ur heart spillin all over her hands like she's holding a valentines day card
gotta mean jump hook faggot, my fist im slamin here
& give F-15 airstrikes till his eyes hanging out his head like a jets landing gear
all u do is take dick faggot, u work it till there balls shine
niggas wreck flo's rear end so much he'd have the highest insurance qoute of all time

good verse...
v day card line was lotb...

AK was more consistent here...

vote- AK...

Bye...