Right great drop - Ima start with what I didn't...agree with shall we say.
Your closer -
As I flip from one to next, rage is on my face. I can’t
Believe that dad commanded a concentration camp.
I see what your attempting but for me it didn't work and it was the only part that for me the rhyme didn't work, I would say its intentional but the way you wrote the sentence I am guessing you meant for it to rhyme. It didn't. An felt somewhat forced.
This was a massive shame as it was amazing until then so I am left with the most recent memory of it being poor...
The good stuff -
Other then that it was all amazing, great rhymes, great story, great content, interesting, kind of funny at the start (i remember the days of sneaking to the attic) Nice vocab...
This was a solid drop and other then the 'life of I' its probably the best drop ive seen on here in a long time.
Though not my favourite for content - this was my fav peice for making me believe this is a true story and im living it with you
This book was fit with leather, more than forty years old
But just wait; this shit gets better, as the story unfolds.
Keep dropping dude
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