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Originally Posted by zygote
perhaps the next rhyme could have been with face and "I can't" could have been the beginning of the next sentence. Good writing, welcome to the artofbattling.com
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thanks for the breakdown.. the internals I was just switching it up with, so I wasn't intending on keeping that scheme through out the whole verse. as far as the last 2 lines I get what you saying, however I wrote it out the way I did to pinpoint how I wanted it to flow. I appreciate your feedback. thanks bro.