Zeedee, that was nice!! You had a good concept and really executed it well. Overall the verse read nicely and smoothly compliments to your flow and rhyme scheme. I dont have anything bad to say about your drop tbh.
Patrown, hmm your stuff seemed too simple for me. I mean its not always bad to have something short but you gotta really work with it to make sure you get your point across and execute it well enough, in this case i thought you just missed on that...
I'm giving this to ZeeDee for having the superior verse v/ ZeeDee
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