Dude you gotta clean up the structure its hard as fuck to read that shit. Anyways, not a bad read (other than the run on lines). Rhyme scheme was iight nothing crazy, Flow seemed to be decent. The story was wack as fuck though, theres no rhyme or reason just like you wanted to try killing people so you did. I duno, kinda makes for a boring plot. Some twists in the plot or some more complexity would have been less mind numbing. All in all though, it wasn't bad at all, just a few minor tweaks and it would be dope af.
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