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Old 02-10-2014, 09:26 PM   #4
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I thought this was pretty dope. Dont really have much to say except fix the structure. Here ill give an example of a good structure.

Hi my name is christopher and im six terms from graduating college.
A theatrics major; or surveyor the way ive been obtaining my knowledge,
Ive seen every action flick, but i think horror's my favorite.
I just adore gore, especially if the storyline's a reality basis.

The structure will make it easier for us to read the piece and find the flow.
Other than that, dope shit.
Keep writing and stay blessed.
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