Didn't eve know what was going on until the 4th line in.. I liked it. Very fun read up until u start talking about killing people. You didn't build up your first victim or your motivation for crime. Shoulda really whent in depth on the psychology. It's a shame you didn't, really fucking loved this though.
Mind doing me a favor and peeping my shit
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