Keepin this brief cause I lost a longer breakdown a few days back..
Baby, not gonna preach on your verses shortcomings, you don't need that. Obviously a last minute effort to prevent a no show and thats commendable. Went with the first spiin you could wrap your head around and props for getting something out.
Deadman, you did you. Obscure extended metaphors and subtly deep, you never quite commit to a cut and dry reference, instead giving just enough for the reader to bridge the connection themselves. That is a feat that resonates deeply and fosters memory. Good shit here, would have been made for a hell of a battle had your opponent had more time to write.
+1 Black
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