Both steered away from the storytelling aspect of things, in a traditionial way of thinkin anyways. It was more told via a barrage of images, think dense lines one after the other. Vulgar with his seemingly endless diction, painting visuals of cityscape and the lot with an egyptian undertone. Some unique shit that you'd only read in a Vulgar verse.. enormous riches/corpse of a rich djinn.. thats a once in a life time rhyme right there lol. Oats, you leaned closer to the storytelling approach, presented the verse with a flow that rolled off the tongue nicely. I like how you follow up syllables with other syllables that compliment their predecessors well. Your attentiveness to this really gives the verse a nice polish.
Kinda a tough one to judge.. Both went directions I'd never have guessed tbh, I really like Oats closer, felt it was really well thought out, but I'm leaning Vulgar on this one.. When it comes down to these close decisions I look for the verse that had the most to bite from, Vulgar had more substance line in and line out for me. Very nice read from the two of you, this'll be one that's definitely open for interpretation. I'd suspect a very close battle, good luck to you both
+1 Vulgar
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