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Old 03-11-2013, 06:40 PM   #12
TYSON
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Inno... the chorus was out of place bro but I think it was sarcasm. The flex was decent but I know u could do better then that. That second half was the best in my opinion. Nice wordplay and scheme.

Red glare....your verse went every which way. The 4th -7th line did not fit the verse at all cause it started off as a story then u big upped your then back to a story. The writing ability is there but your conscious thought kinda scatters if u know what I mean.

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