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Old 03-11-2013, 02:04 PM   #11
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Aite... Tough, thin beat to work with. Inno went with a flex, and Red Glare went for a short story/ vignette almost

Both pieces were really short and self-contained so idk how much of a breakdown I need... Inno's wordplay was okay but kinda Lil Waynish, it was simple and clipped into couplets instead of building up steam or bein used to link together imagery or as the punchline to a flex bar. It was okay, the way I read it, it matched the beat but played it safe with the short bars yo. Not Inno's best, but nice and not too wordy or ambitious.

Red glare's piece was like a cool excerpt to a fully fledged verse.. Imagery was nice and the lines of speech interlaced well with one another, tho you shoved a lot of content in like this was the meat of a larger piece. In the end it was a cool image but you tried to give it a plot and and a conclusion and a twist, and it definitely needed more to make clear what your angle on the topic was... Left confused but intrigued wanting more


V/ innovator.. Played it safe and Red Glare rushed and tripped over himself
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