Big Baby – I admire how batshit insane your verses are, you’re arguably the most creative guy in the tournament at this point, and this verse was full of your usual insanity and I enjoyed the attack on the users of the open mic forum or AOWL – but this week it was more hit and miss for me than in previous rounds, and more miss than hit here in all honesty. The rhymes didn’t have your usual wit to them, the imagery of last round wasn’t there which was largely what I felt put you over Zyg if I remember rightly. It seemed like this read as your last hurrah or that you didn’t wish to partake anymore and this was your swan song, a farewell to the writers you respected or just wanted to shout out before you left. I could be wrong, but that’s definitely the vibe this gave off, it’s below par compared to what we all know you’re truly capable of when the mood takes you.
Black Deadman – Great introspective verse from you here, you’re the master when it comes to these little snippets of visual imagery all collected together in a few words at a time that individually don’t amount to much – but piece together almost like a collage what you’re trying to depict.
Quote:
lakeshore, 1800, cherry pepsi and lime
riding slow, Eldorado. dashboard maple and pine
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I liked that a lot, especially the ‘dashboard maple and pine’, it told me as a reader all I needed to know to evoke a mental image without having to make this a paint-by-numbers affair and have it spelt out for me.
‘Capillary Capulet’ was a great way to word it, short and succinct, I liked the alliteration too. I’m glad you took on the ‘explorers’ theme too as I went a similar direction this round, different topic and a different route, but there was a familiarity of the two pieces that I can appreciate you coming up with. Great minds and all that haha!
I don’t know, but for my money I have Deadman winning here. Just more I liked and less I didn’t. Big Baby will make me sad if he’s to leave, though. :(