zenland -
"Where's my respiration? My breath is takin away from debts and wages,
I'm left in rages forming preperations to level nations and create seperations
From domestications, You don't realize we've stepped in cages,"
i think a dropped S now and then could have helped me not skip a beat throughout the intro.
not too big of a deal, and not voting on it.. but some are here for advice- so that's mine.
"While kids are hopin the mages of Wall Street can fix a potion
To ease the wound, But they keep it open, The bloods seepin and flowin
On the streets they grow in, But they say they'll be peace in a moment"
thank you sir- may i have another?
the W alliteration helped in the last couple bars.. as far as mechanics goes, you fucking nailed it.
that message is clear. i feel a need to go past what we hear, and what we see.. or better yet, what's fed to us.
all i could ask for from this is a little bit of an explanation on maybe how we DO get past that jaded vision our history classes instill in us. but i really feel your message ( we need to rise against the status quo imposed on us by a government we have no say in-there isn't anything but god between us and our decision to follow that lead blindly-the very machine we hope will save us from ourselves is actually an instrument of our demise-..) and give you props for puttin it up front and in our face like you did. observations are on point, direction desired, overall- nice drop.
bleak:.. i heard something like this before..
"5-0 creepin, hold my breath when they ridin past
It's respiration when I dodge a set of handcuffs.
Cause any flaw in what you say will get ya man snuffed."
but freal, i felt these bars.
"A virus, that's chokin air out of the bystanders.
The lowest cities strain the people with these high standards.
I'm gettin more than sick of askin these questions.
Now my answers come in grams just to mask the aggression.
The mission is easy? it's the vision of grief
Time served in the alleys gave these tricks up my sleeve."
that's real talk no matter which way you look at it.
/v- zenland - as was said before, i really didn't take as much from bleak as i did from zenland. although honestly on a track- i think bleak's might have sounded cleaner.. zenland delivered a more clear picture.
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