iambent- enjoyed the emotion in this weeks piece. a lot of real life situations and emotions i can relate to were here.facebook fights winding up in dead fetuses.. well, true to life. shits fucked up but you came pretty good with it.hitting on too many of my real life situations without development just pissed me off without letting me chew on it.. i liked the flow better here though.
ink- as stupid as this sounds, "what they'll do" and "find commendable" grabbed and shook me a little.
(end of whips, get intermixed. etc etc.)i like the broken assonance. maybe it's just my mood of the week, but this week you came through.
ink: i have to give you the /v this week because i related more. put simply, i'm feeling a little guilty about being an asshole son - AND you hit that nail right on the motherfucking head. can't really say it any differently. these two bars clenched it for me.
I'm not sorry... she's just competition for food
And if she's gone, I can go the days twice as full
you really made me feel guilty with those two. and for that, i vote ink.
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