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Old 03-11-2013, 01:08 AM   #11
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This battle almost read like a dope collab; both styles complimented each other.

Tyson, first I read your verse accapella and thought it was hard. you have proven to me you are a capable poet. Then I decided to read with the beat and I couldn't catch the drift really but I like how you faded out with

a new agenda is still afoot, the few that abide and remember, sit and look
our civil defenders danced to the drum of a different foot until the rhythm shook


all I hear is drums
All I see is guns
No african spirituals, sung
Cause all I hear is guns

The authenticity of your slang was lost in translation when I tried rapping it, but while reading it I appreciated how you styled it.

Vinzr, the beat was already playing so I decide to read your rhyme with the beat as well and it flowed smooth. Had a desperado vibe going. One line really threw me off cause of our accent difference.

Every window we pass, receive strange looks as we pass by
Women, children and men, all stand blank faced like it’s a harsh sight

parse by - ? pass by rhymes with crash sky

If it weren't for that line I'd say you'd have the better overall verse considering the beat

vote - tyson
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