some was cool, other parts the wording made it slightly awkward like "record the sex" to me just seems corny or out of place - there's so much that rhymes with that "-eh' sound too that you could have chosen from. Maybe i'm just an elitist faggot, but that's my honest view on that section. The range rover/hangover thing though was nice to me, I was glad to see you switched it up, and then also that you brought an end to it and carried on with something else rather than carrying it for too long. Multi-strings have a time and a place and can show your skill and technical ability off really well, but it's important to know when to stop with them also IMHO. I thought for what it was, this was a good little dispaly of skill.
keep that pen moving!
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