These niggas not allowed expos??? Llf, no personals what-so-ever.
Floss- You had some cool multi's in here, man, but you need some punches! Naa' mean? Lol liked your T bag opener, some good giggles there. I didn't quite get the second bar, it had some decent flow though. Third bar was worded awkwardly, like to the max. Didn't come off natural. Next bar was ight, seen better from you @ La for sure though. Closer had a nice nameflip/ play. Good openers and closers, just need some personals in between. Your verse gets a 6/10. Decent.
Tyler- First bar had a nice internal in it, but it was really not true and it did not hit hard for sure. If it was true, throw out an expo! The first line of the second bar was worded very awkwardly, like if you was in a conversation you wouldn't say it like that. The next bar, was it true? Like I said, throw up an expo! Assuming that it is, it was actually a nice punch. Next bar was shit imo. You don't know his wife! Lol. Next bar was alright, deffo not spectacular. Last bar was actually an OK punch, but the thing is that it was worded so awkwardly, I almost lost it. 4/10
My Vote Goes To: Flossaurus for some better wordplay. My advice to both would be to find personals and incorporate punchlines with them, and not waste your setup bar.
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