This wasn't my favorite submission of yours. There were a few awkward spots both within the rhymes and within the content itself, particularly the "you've" in the second line. But mostly, the rhymes weren't complex enough to balance out the relatively simple content. A punchline or more graphic or original quotable of some sort would have helped this quite a bit. But I've seen plenty better from you, so I'm thinking this was mostly just a quick flex.
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