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Old 01-31-2014, 01:40 AM   #3
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'And that was the night I reclaimed my brother' line hit me like a ton of bricks. I had a good gulp after the tuberculosis line.

Decent writing; good story telling though, you relayed the story at an effective pace. I really liked the wording of the opening segement.

Overall satisfied with what I read. The photograph was great. Not sure if you wrote it intentionally or added the picture later.

Keep it real. Keep at it. Peace.
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