[Split]

Smoothtung I'm guessing? sup brah?

Pretty cool verse. Concept's been done before, but you kept it pretty fresh. Very unique word choice and description, you can see the different influences on the writing compared to strictly NC locals.


I zone in when hunger hits and smother it as supper comes..
..float springs in subtle ships an smuggle bits of summer's sun.

fresh, "float springs" felt weird but otherwise solid bar.

schemes were tight, but some rhymes/ wording came across as too dense. It wasnt enough to negatively affect your verse. The only legit complaint i have is the verse could have been more directed (Gaddafi bit didnt fit). Keep keyin