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Vulg -- This was a more focused verse from you. Not in terms of your focus but the meat of the verse was more direct than I've seen you lately. Took me by surprise really. Some fantastic imagery across the verse, I liked the break out options couplet a lot. The most powerful aspect of this verse was how subtle you made the connection between his beginning and end. In the beginning he had nothing and in the end he had everything but was so bent on being a hidden figure he lived like he had nothing. He had a mansion and chauffeur and money but the house was just an empty box to him - no wife nothing to come home to. The car got him places but he didnt even like to use it - walks home. He has all the money but is frugal. The underlying message of all for naught with your attention to detail was stellar.

Split -- I had a hard time finding your flow at the end, but I liked the ending a lot. The picture I'm left with was full circle but that's both good and bad in this case. I felt like a lot of this verse hinged on your basic concept and you overused the crutch causing the verse to have a redundant feel even though it moved. I found the imagery to make the piece stagnant while the characterization moved this piece. Dont get me wrong - it was well worded I just didnt like the pacing. What you did with the characterization was great - it came full circle and the science of studying line was a dope flip.

Overall - I liked this battle a bit, what ended up deciding this battle for me is that Split's verse felt more stagnant than Vulgars. There was more depth behind Vulgars verse and thats why I

vote- Vulg