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Old 01-27-2014, 04:21 PM   #3
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hahah wow the vocab you use here is great man

how do you teach dogs to swim?" She fixed an abysmally fake smirk
then finished the riddle with a little visual frame work:
"Throw the pup in the water and let it rely on instinctual nature"
I was left split into vapors - a fly on the wall of a dream.
A house fit for Gates with a fake grotto and stream -
where Momma would be: holding the whelp in a worried position.
Hands under the shoulders while the bitch is squirming and kicking
- but it was as useful as training courier pigeons.
^ this is awesome lol

overall this verse is fire. Raw and funny as hell but quite elegantly pieced together. Congrats on a keeper man
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