Catfish - Captivating writing. Unique plot had my attention from start to finish. The way you place yourself in the minds of the characters and in the circumstances you construct really gives your writing a special touch. Subtleties such as "Lord Venkateswara looks down into his dungeon. It brings him no pleasure". Continuous character growth throughout and wonderful description not only painted a picture for me, but played a scene. I feel your ending was far from what I expected, and although I wouldn't say I was disappointed with it, I suppose I was hoping something with more of a BLAMMO factor, however it was still well thought out and carried out and supplied the reader with a morale epiphany.
Big Baby - Why did you not capitalize Ravel in it's entirety? This piece was a conceptual masterpiece. You did a very good job organizing the layout before you began writing and the prepwork paid dividends. The first three stanzas played the role of their respective seasons very nicely due to diction and the relation to the evolving extended metaphor of the relationship. Winter was obviously slightly different however you crafted it into a lovely finale. The incorporation of that quote was unique, added insight, and didn't really take away from anything so I'd call it a success. Well executed verse on all level.
Prognosis, very tough one to call. Zygote had a straightforward delivery that, through the simplicity in it's wording, had me read through it with no break and held my attention from start to finish. The complexities in bbs verse had me reread some lines for clarity, some words I had to look at for a second to recognize them as if I haven't seen them written before. Zygote told a very imaginative story with such pixelated detail and produced a 'morale' to it which correlated nicely with the topic, however baby essentially was kind of following the topic on two levels; seasonally and with the extended metaphor. Although both pieces were engrossing, their can only be one Highlander and I feel big baby did more with the concept. Hard to believe I can enjoy a verse as much I did zygotes and still vote against it. Haven't read many battles but I'd be surprised if there were many better then this one.
+1 Big Baby
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