Brilliant. Seriously, I enjoyed the fuck out of this. Probably because I really fucking love mental health-themes to begin with. Specifically enjoyed how you used a rich language and a solid rhymescheme to uncover the scene as it played out, and really make the reader understand what is going on in a unique way. Thought it was clever to use the eclipse as a meta for the mind deteriorating from its normal state.
Dope as fuck.
You and @
Vulgar should do a collabo.
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