Zygote - I was fond of this. A story with a lesson entwined often tickles my fancy more than any other kind. You had a decent villain in Lord Venta - wish he would've played a more prominent role in the unveiling of the topical "statement." Aside from that one nit, it was a respectable showing.
big baby - You rabble rouser, you. You rabbi on nutmeg steroids. This was a freespirited splurge/plunge from/into the realm of love politics. I don't know if half of the instances where you turned poetic phrase were sarcastic. If they were, you got away with it because you excelled in that aspect of mockery which had a noticeable charm to it. As is, it was a feast. Good work.
I'm going against the grain and casting a vote for Zygote.
It was more to my liking. I liked the premise of his idea more - probably because of my own views on humanity. BB seemed to have an easy sleeper-hold on the topic. Relationship related themes aren't really my thing, not to take anything away from the quality of BB's verse.
Vote - Zygote
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