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Old 03-09-2013, 07:43 PM   #10
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Cdm.. some gripping details in the content made this stan out... it was as if ur telling a story while its still unfinished and ur iving that story of kinding this woman... the flow was cool and consistent but it was the depth of the story that made it develop well for me and thosethe illustrations gave it light and experiene for the characters... real or not.. not sure.. but still good display.

Mac, Firstly, if english isn't ur first language, this is a pretty good display of it... with that being said, the narration of this was kinda creepy... like being too in love with someone almost.... the content was clearl written though and understandable and the meta of pulling the sun out was cool too.. this needed some examples or experiences y'all shared or something more to make us believe this love that was shared... as it stands, its just sounding like someone is obsessivey loved..

Vote cdm for much better content with better structure,details and flow.
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