Zenland, some good points made in our verse, kinda cliche overall, but with good flow to carry it made it cool too. The ending wraped it nicely, was more than just something to say to wrap it up and I appreciate that from writers. Political verses have to make a clear cut point and u def did that with yours and your narration made it a cool read.
bleak, the blunted flow expressions of life.. this was a bit deeply personal and it reads like that with some pain in the naration. I feel it... and even more important, u expressed it clearly with good flow and still staying grounded thru struggles and shit... taking a blunt back to reflect on life and just give a little of tht reflection.... cool shit, I appreciate that...
Vote bleak... had more depth and narrated with better and more intereting content
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