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Chessmaster - awesome work at times here ZYG. Echoes of Aesop and I liked the consistentsy of your characters despite their brief appearances. There are several inconsistencies, however. We start in a dungeon, and end in a graveyard. The beginning and ending are far too abstract for my liking, and it is also highly unbelievable to me that one simple breeze will cause the belligerent lepers to calm down and hold hands. Can't really discern a coherent point, but I will say that the characterization of the lepers was by far the strongest part in this imho. Also, I can't really tell whether you're speaking as author omniscient or as Lord Venkateswara himself, that should be made clear. This is conceptually strong though, echoing the structure of previous pieces you have dropped, and despite my criticism I enjoyed it. Thanks.

Big Baby - Dope, my favorite piece from you by far. The consistency was there, the ending rang profound and the wording was great. A few unneeded flourishes but that's gonna come with your style. Your command of the english language is strong and you definitely weaved a dope lil piece here. The keystyling you do developed solid nueral connections and an affinity for cool unique rhymes but also allowed you to improve your wording for more serious pieces significantly. Echoed real to me. I enjoyed both works but BB took this easily imo. Thanks for the work gentlemen

V/ big baby