[Adonis]

Split-Eight - I haven't finished reading yet, but I'm going to start with the flow isn't up to par. It makes it hard for me to follow. I always read a verse 2 if not 3 times, but this one I'm forced to, first read to understand the flow, 2nd to understand the meanings and remember what I forgot simply because I'm having to reread half the line 3 times to catch it....Blunt, I know, sorry.

First read I was picturing Atlantis in that 2nd stanza, would've been dope if continued but you changed it up some...OK, so flow on second read was much better, I guess I just had to catch it first. A story about an archaeologist exploring a lost, ruined city. He discovers a chamber and finds a dead astronaut or deep sea diver??? To me its a bit unclear, vague even. I enjoy when its left to the reader to decide, but there was so much detail in imagery I feel like you just fell a bit short instead of purposefully being vague in the end so "I CAN" decide. But to me the archaeologist found Atlantis, wishful thinking because I feel i'm wrong. Either way I loved the imagery, flow was decent, much better then first thought. Concept was nice.

Aesthetic - Flow was best I've read this week by far, went with the beat well Although how I read it I had one correction but as everything else was smooth I'm sure it's just pronunciation or something so I won't mention it. content...To me, it seemed a few lines rhymed extremely well, but for the sake of rhyme, not content or meaning. the 2nd stanza had the majority

How does the colors feel complexion. Didn't like this...wording issue.

All in all the main point of this verse IMO was just about life...Great flow to the verse' entirety. The length really does hinder the entire piece, I think one more stanza would have summed up quite a bit.


Vote: Split

This was a very, very close battle. you both had highs...Aes had flow on lock while 8 had better content to me....both had lows...Aes piece ended too soon leaving much to be desired, split also seemed unfinished, rather, didn't come full circle IMO. But in the end I liked the concept behind Split's verse just a bit more then the flow of Aesthetics. Close battle, will go either way when people wake up and vote on this shit....Good verses to you both, I have to be critical or you learn nothing, but I enjoyed both